For this exercise in "The Curious Researcher" we had to come up with 3 different introductions for our research paper. I think that this is a great idea because I would have never even thought to do this before. I believe that it will give my paper variety and also cause me to think outside the box while trying to come up with creative ways to say things.
1. It is senior year of high school and you have to decide what you are going to major in while you attend college. The questions, "What will I chose. What do I want to do with my life?" keep running through your head. You love music and have the talent and ability but you are unsure about the job market for music majors right out of college. People keep telling you that you will never make it in the music industry, but what if what they are saying is false? There are jobs in the music industry, in fact there are many different things you can do with a music degree if you keep your mind open to them.
2. When you think of someone who is majoring in music what do you think of? Do you think of their talents and abilities, or do you think that they will never be able to find a job in their field of study? Research proves that music majors can find a job in the music industry. There are many options out there including, performance, pedagogy, composition, business, just to name a few. It may seem like people who major in music are not finding jobs, but in reality I believe that they are being too narrow in their thinking and should be more open when it comes to finding something in their field of expertise.
3. Many people decide to major in music and fine arts because that is what they love to do. I chose to major in Music Pedagogy because I love playing violin and would like to learn how to teach it privately. Before I came to college and decided my major I was at a standstill because I had always heard that music majors could never get jobs because they had a "worthless degree". I was told that many times, but I myself chose to pursue music in college because that is my passion and my life. This is why many people are majoring in music. Even though I was told that I would probably never get a job and use my degree for what it is for I found out through research that there jobs available in the music industry.
I like the second paragraph and feel like it will add depth and insight to my research paper.
What do you predict this paper is about? What is its focus? It is about music majors and why people should go into it.
Can you guess what central question I'm trying to answer? Why people should become music majors
Can you predict what my thesis might be? Music majors can find jobs if they are open.
How would you characterize the tone of the paper? Optimistic
2 is the one that i like the best.
ReplyDeleteI like the 2nd one
ReplyDeleteI like number 1 the best, it is personal, relatable, and well written. It gives a real sense of the condudrum one faces when entering college.
ReplyDeleteI think that the first paragraph is the best one personally. You made it very interesting and it made me want to continue reading! I was actually looking forward to a bit more. You made it something that many people can relate to, something that any people have asked previously or are going to ask, and still maintained topic. You got the who, why, and what too, which was very cool because you can easily work your way into the where and the when. I personally enjoyed the first one and thought it was also a playful introduction which kept my attention but still emphasized your topic.
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I thought that number three was the best. It really grabbed my attention and made me want to hear what you had to say on the topic of jobs for music majors. Including your own personal story really added a lot to it.
ReplyDeleteI like the second one the most because it provides some research to back up your statements. I think it is the best-worded out of the three and gives a good idea of what the paper will be about. I'm big into music but not interested in becoming involved in the music industry so the second introduction still caught my attention.
ReplyDelete#2 is well formatted but the thesis is a little too broad. Maybe switching it out for the thesis from #1 may help.
ReplyDeleteI like the first one, it seems to be the most attention grabbing
ReplyDeleteAll three of these paragraphs are well written. I personally think that the first paragraph is the best one. The first paragraph gives an example to the thought process of becoming a music major in college right out of high school. I can personally relate to that first paragraph, because that is exactly what had happened to me when I was beginning to chose my major. I ended up doing what I wanted to do and not what anyone else was telling to me to. And that is what you want, the reader being able to relate to this topic. Especially in the first paragraph, where it grabs the readers attention right away.
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